To be anemic is to be without blood correct? Were you trying to say that you don't think this story is vibrant or alive enough? Kimahri is a quiet, steadfast character, especially in solitude, I think you nailed the moment perfectly, in the way it would have been seen by anyone watching from Kimahri's head. To have tried to make this moment seem more exciting would have been a mistake, and out of character for Kimahri. It's an in-depth peice, not a action-flick. And it happens to be very enjoyable.
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Date: 2006-12-24 08:29 am (UTC)Kimahri is a quiet, steadfast character, especially in solitude, I think you nailed the moment perfectly, in the way it would have been seen by anyone watching from Kimahri's head.
To have tried to make this moment seem more exciting would have been a mistake, and out of character for Kimahri. It's an in-depth peice, not a action-flick.
And it happens to be very enjoyable.